I wrote these potential song lyrics....help? advice? honest opinion!!

(sry for any spelling mistakes)





Me crying, you yelling


we are here every night and nothing changes


nothing solved


it hurts more that you realize but i smile when I'm hurt


laugh when I'm sad








if you like to hurt me so much


why didn't you just show me from the beginning


we wouldn't have to situation


why do you have to be like this


so uncaring, so hurtful, so not what i fell in love w/


could you have not cared anymore, been any more selfish?


i don't so because here we are again








Me crying, you yelling


we are here every night and nothing changes


nothing solved


it hurts more that you realize but i smile when I'm hurt


laugh when I'm sad





you will never tell how i really feel because


you don't care or take time to look past and see


who i really am you so conceived in yourself


your head to big for your body


how could any body ever truly love you?


i can't believe you put me through this again





Me crying, you yelling


we are here every night and nothing changes


nothing solved


it hurts more that you realize but i smile when I'm hurt


laugh when I'm sad





can we just sit down and talk?


or do you always have to be in control


you frustrate me more than you know

















and if u could help idk if it should be slow, fast or what genre!I wrote these potential song lyrics....help? advice? honest opinion!!
It looks like fairly fast pop to me. It doesn't look too bad, but it needs some work. Maybe when you set it to music the hook will be better, but I think there is something wrong with the 'it hurts more that you realize' line but I can't figure out how to fix it. I also think you will probably want to delete some extra words when you find a beat to put it to.





But yeah, you have a good start there--it may be time to start on the music and fix the problems in the lyrics while you work on that. I think it will come to you once you dive into it. I wrote these potential song lyrics....help? advice? honest opinion!!
Music section please.
I think it has potential